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  • Huh, fair enough. I hadn’t intended any of that tbh, except maybe the illegal stuff. In my head, it’s less that she’s used to being high/savvy enough to have avoided it and more she’s just built different so a single edible wouldn’t fuck her up like it did Haru who’s a lightweight.

    I can see how maybe Yusha was like ⅒th as high as Haru was but she doesn’t seem as straight-laced as Haru so it wouldn’t surprise me if she’s like, used to a light buzz? Especially given the “interested in ‘illegal stuff’” bit.

    Also in my head Yusha isn’t necessarily totally oblivious, she also likes Haru a lot but doesn’t know how to react to someone liking her back / expressing interest in her. Which I should lean into more.

    Probably wouldn’t hurt. I think I mentioned a few chapters back that we haven’t gotten much insight into Yusha’s perspective on all this yet.

    Hm, would be interesting to do but I’m not sure if Haru is the kind of person to become intoxicated often voluntarily. Maybe someone poisons her, or an enemy’s semblance is getting people high/drunk on the fly?

    Or they end up busting a drug ring? Like a fight breaks out in a lab and Haru ends up inhaling something? Or a crop field ends up on fire? The latter one could be funny because you could have the entire team high.



  • I literally haven’t used the subscribed feed in over a decade ever since they first started doing that shit. At one time I was subscribed to 300+ channels, now I’m only subscribed to one singular channel I never check (Tomii11, a young boy who at the time had brain cancer and wanted to be a youtuber so there was a grassroots effort to help him find success) because they thoroughly enshittified the subscribed feed (and no I’m not going to click the fucking bell I don’t want notifications, I want a functioning feed).








  • Aww but I love my one-off bits (◞‸ ◟)

    You could probably lean into it a little more (and thus make it not a one-off) to make it stand out less, but on the other side of the coin I don’t want you think my opinion is the end-all be-all here. I mean, I know I’m like the only one actually providing feedback but don’t think you have to stop just because I say it’s bad, especially if it gives you joy.

    huh really? I thought it was not enough set up.

    I mean, we get insights into Yusha’s character a bit here – interested in “illegal stuff”, probably too eager to get into fights, either used to being high or savvy enough to have avoided it, might be a little oblivious to Haru’s feelings but definitely concerned about her – and Haru being high feels like a Checkov’s gun especially since she had a moment where she was surprised by her own hand touching her horn (so I expect we’ll see that come back where she’ll be intoxicated and her Semblance is off). Sky being in the night market is suspicious enough but he’s probably not supposed to be there, either, and the students just don’t realize that, so it makes sense that we’ll learn why he was there by the end of the arc (also it seemed like he recognized what Yusha meant by “the Artist”), plus there’s the whole Perry-goes-missing aspect that will probably open the next chapter. I can’t say what exactly you’re planning from this but there’s a number of little seeds with opportunity to grow.

    I think he reads as casual because in my head, Sky is not much older than the students.

    Oh, yeah that always throws me off when you have fresh graduates as teachers. It happens a lot in anime where there’s only supposed to be like at most a 5-year gap but probably because of my own upbringing it’s hard for me not to read every teacher as being like 15 years older than their students.


  • Sensing the mood had become Grimm,

    I assume this is intentional and not like an autocorrect goof, but I tend to avoid turns of phrase like this because it stands out unless you go through the effort of changing the entire world’s vocab to account for it being fantastical. Like, don’t get me wrong, I can appreciate the occasional “I swear to Dust” or “oh my Oum” but it just looks odd when it’s one-off like this.

    They found J’atoh gambling at a table, and clearly losing.

    This may be my own preferences here, but both halves of this description are annoyingly vague. Gambling with what? Cards? Dice? Beyblades? Is it something like you’d see at a casino or more like the 3-card monte scam? And how can they tell J’atoh is “clearly” losing? Have they been playing strip poker? Is the pot sitting out on the table? I’m just not able to picture what they found.

    Haru scanned the crowd, her eyes lazily drifting person to person until she spotted who Yusha was talking about a few moments later.

    May have missed a word – should be something like “from person to person”

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    I can practically hear the sinister music sting at the end of the chapter here. I think you did a decent amount of setup here but yeah it definitely reads as if this and the previous should have just been one chapter. The encounter with Sky reads a little odd to me but that’s mostly because he keeps being so casual with the students, waiting to threaten to report them for breaking curfew until the very end.














  • 110% this is the way.

    I still have friends of nearly 20 years whom I met on the official Wizards of the Coast forums back when those still existed and I’ve managed to meet a handful in person once or twice. I’ve made friends through Discord, fanfic sites, even youtube whom I’ve also met IRL (usually at cons), even if I have been terrible at sticking around sometimes. I’m even making friends on here just by posting and generally being nice and being around, which tbh I wasn’t expecting both because of the low traffic and because of the depersonalized nature of this inherited-from-reddit interface.